Friday, December 3, 2010

try for love ~ an etheree





i got this from 1manview of Shades of Erotic Poetry. he writes erotica and did this while challenging his readers to do it, too. for those of you who have never heard of it, an etheree is a form of syllabic poetry (similar to a haiku) where each line is done in syllables of 1-10...you can even go backwards and do 10-1. this is mine...


give
just once
give it up
give into it
quit running from it
pretending you don't care
masking your fear of love's hold
faking it, but not making it
choking off your own intake of breath
all to say you're in love...when you're not
saying what it is...is enough now
when it could never make you whole
when it barely touches you...
not like i touched you then
and live in your mind
right this moment
in this time
always
try!
don't lie
let it in
hold your breath, babe
and submerge yourself
even if it's not me
even if her name ain't mine
open up and give her a drop
and you will slowly see it wave in
and your giving will create your living...
yes
i do
love you still
in this way...
universally
as a heart to a heart
and my heart wants you happy
then again i could be so wrong
trapped off in my own idea of us
with it being me who needs to let go...

5 comments:

Sundae said...

Damn, Sis... I'm diggin' this... muchly

Havent written an etheree in eons...

Thanks for the inspiration!

Thee_Kween said...

You're welcome and thank you! I hope you clicked my friend's link. He's a kinky so and so. LOL

Reggie said...

Poetry is one thing that I never mastered. I am forever in awe of those of you that actually do it well.

Nice post.

1manview said...

Beautiful... You take to poetry like a painter takes to his brush... I would say shame on me for not finding this sooner, but you post like the wiind... lol ... Enjoyed this tremendously...

Thee_Kween said...

@Reggie~ Thank you much, I appreciate the nod of approval ;)

@1manview~ That is one of the BEST compliments I've ever received...thank you..

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